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Stephen Churchill
Jan 19 - Technology: Beauty and the Beast

	This seems muddled to me, but the muddle is a common one.
I would like you to rewrite it in a way that is responsive to the
following points.

	1. The example of weapons needs to be made responsive to
considerations of defense.  Those who claim the U.S. has a defense
problem don't advocate weapons on the grounds of advancing their
political beliefs but on the grounds that if we don't have them,
someone, at present the Soviets, will take over.  If you are inclined
to the "better red than dead" thesis, then be sure and reply to the
argument that we would probably end up both red and dead, because
communists countries have shown themselves capable of war with each
other, and we might end up as expendable cannon fodder.

	2. In your remark on behalf of the blue collar worker,
respond to two arguments.

	a. We have never known in the past whether about the effect
of a technological development on employment and are unlikely to
know now.

	b. Economists find know correlation between periods of
rapid technological advance and periods of unemployment.

	3. Respond to the argument that Government intervention
has had poor results in the past because of inability to predict
its effects and because the form of intervention has been too
responsive to interest group pressure.

	4. Elaborate what Government intervention to regulate
information technology you would consider.
Andrea Gallagher - jan 19
Home information terminal - points of interest

Please fix the spelling mistakes.  More important elaborate your
points in textual form.
Eric Sean Jackson - jan 19

I should prove that my 20 years use of computers hasn't made handwriting
obsolete by scribbling only your paper, but these comments are
better thought out when written with the computer.  I have even
revised these comments on your essay.

Please rewrite addressing the following points.

	It isn't clear to me whether you are fearing that
society would be damaged or merely saying that computer
terminals wouldn't dominate books and letters, because
children's books would still be wanted and many people would
still prefer to use pen and ink.

Would you suppose that books for children would become
obsolete before parents and teachers found the computerized
substitutes better in all important ways?  Likewise with
letters.  Likewise, will people fully accept computerized files
before they either get used to the demands of the computer
systems or get them more "user friendly".
Kelly Gee - jan 19
Home computers

Please fix the typos and reread with an eye to improving the
sentence structure.

Address the question of why things are moving slowly.  Do you really
think it is because "society is hesitant of the consequences"?
It seems to me that society, i.e. Government,
 has done nothing to hold up the development of home computers.
It has developed slowly, because the suppliers of equipment and
services have been slow to provide good enough services at
a price people are willing to pay.

If you don't agree, say what the Government has done.  If you do
agree say what new services and at what kind of price would expand
the market.
Michael Sides - jan 19

Computers: The Next Generation